With the rapid growth of our economy, the quality of our lives is improving for the better. Recently the issue of the high medical fee and the difficultly to see doctors has been brought to public attention. 
    
There are three reasons for this problem. One of the main reasons is that the medicine circulation is directly responsible for the general high price of medicine, which makes some patients even unable to afford to see doctors. Another primary reason is that an increasing number of patients go into the big hospital to see doctors.  As a result, some seriously ill people could not be taken good medical help. The last reason is the government is short of support. 
    
My suggestions to deal with the problem are follows. To begin with, it is urgent to create public hospital. Second, patients should change their habits of seeing doctor.

　　老师评语：得分10-12分
     
该文较好的完成了写作要求，语言错误比较少，句式的变换也较灵活。只是在今后的写作练习中，需要对一些细小的语法现象加以注意，比如名词单复数等。