a。范文原句:
I tend to agree that young children can be negatively affected by too much time spent on the computer every day。
b。启示:这句话中用到了tend to agree 这个短语,表示“倾向于同意”,表现出不绝对的语气。
c。对写作的影响(模仿范句):
I am inclined to think that…; I tend to believe that…
2。措辞严谨
a范文原句: This is partly because sitting in front of a screen for too long can be damaging to both the eyes and the physical posture of young child, regardless of what they are using the computer for。
b。启示:副词partly,貌似简单,但是实际上大多数考生没有用过。这个副词虽小,但是表达的意思是:这里列举的原因只是一部分,体现出了写作的严谨。
c。对写作的影响(模仿范句):
中文例句:因为道路体系不好,所以大城市堵车。
未模仿前:The traffic congestion is because of the poor road system。
模仿后:The traffic congestion is partly because of the poor road system。
类似表达:be largely due to
3。对抽象名词的解释、举例,细化抽象名词:
a。范文原句: Even when children use a computer of other purposes, such as getting information or emailing friends…
b. purpose比较抽象,such as getting information or emailing friends属于对purpose内容的解释,通过对抽象名词的细化,一方面可以把凑点字数,把句子写得比较长,另一方面,使得句子更细节化。
c。对写作的影响(模仿范句):
中文例句1:有些技术会有负面影响。
未模仿前:Some technologies are of negative impact. →
模仿后:Some technologies, such as weapons of mass destruction, are of negative impact。
类似细化抽象名词的表达:from…to…; whether…or…;
中文例句2.:我在中国的那几年,有机会跟中国的翻译们紧密地合作。
未模仿前:During those years when I was in China, I had the opportunity to work closely with Chinese translators. →
模仿后:During those years when I was in China, I had the opportunity to work closely with Chinese translators, from beginners fresh out of school to those most capable senior professors。
例句3.:政府该重视教育。
未模仿前:Governments should attach great importance to education.→
未模仿后:Governments, whether rich or poor, should attach great importance to education。
4。积累漂亮词汇:(1)精彩词汇(2)主题词汇
(1)精彩词汇
a。范文原句: Too much exposure can encourage children to be self-centered and insensitive to others。
b:启示: exposure 用得非常地道,一般考生不会想到,同时这个词做主语,构成了无灵主语(非人称开头)。
c。对写作的影响(模仿范句):
中文例句:小孩在网络上接触到太多不良信息对他们的成长不好。
未模仿前:If children get access to too much undesirable information on the Internet, then it would undermine their personal growth. / Gaining too much undesirable information on the Internet would undermine their personal growth。
模仿后:Heavy exposure to undesirable information on the Internet would undermine the personal growth of children。
(2)主题词汇(电视电脑类话题): self-centered, insensitive
5。积累精彩句型: