九.累赘(redundancy)
言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词；写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组；能用词组的不用从句或句子。如：
in spite of the fact that he is lazy, i like him.本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句，我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为：in spite of his laziness, i like him.例1. for the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.
剖析：整个句子可以大大简化。
改为：
diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.
十.不连贯(incoherence)
不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语，或是结构上不畅通。这也是考生常犯的毛病。
例1. the fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.
剖析：the fresh water与逗号后的it不连贯。it与things在数方面不一致。
常见联词
表层进
first, firstly to begin with/second, secondly to start with/third, thirdly what’s more/also and then/and equally important/besides in addition/further in the first place/still furthermore
last but not the least/next besides/too moreover/finally
表举例
for example for instance/to illustrate as an illustration/after all/表解释
/as a matter of fact/frankly speaking/in this case namely/in other words
表总结
in summary in a word/in brief in conclusion/to conclude in fact/indeed in short/in other words /of course/it is true specially/namely in all/that is to summarize/thus as has been said/altogether in other words/finally in simpler terms/in particular that is/on the whole to put it differently/therefore表强调
of course indeed/above all most important/emphasis certainly in fact
表让步
still nevertheless/in spite of all the same/even so after all/concession granted naturally/of course
表比较
in comparison likewise/similarly equally/however likewise/in the same way/
表转折
by contrast although/e same time but/in contrast nevertheless/notwithstanding on the contraryon the other hand otherwise/regardless still/though yet/despite the fact that even so/even though for all that/however in spite of/instead |
