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新托福写作辅导“简单不代表不好”

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  In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather’s family.

  本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather’s family”,而使用了被动语态后,仿佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

  In the fall, my grandfather’s family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.

  5. 用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语,例如下面这句话:

  My grandfather didn’t have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends.

  Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:

  My grandfather didn’t have time to loiter with his school friends.

  6. 有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达,例如:

  Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree.

  两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:

  Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree.

  简单并不代表没有难度,一篇好的托福作文,必须逻辑清晰、词汇和句式运用恰当。如果考生对长句没有太大的把握,那么不妨拆成更有把握的短句,一样能获得高分。

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